高中英语读后续写 高分作文专项训练 写作思路和分析

文章分析和写作指导

1. 主旨大意。这篇文章主要说的是主人公Tom在靠近海边的地方有一个农场。因为海边暴风雨比较多，当暴风雨来的时候，需要巨大的工作量。Tom雇佣的工人因为受不了繁重的劳动而辞职。后来，Henry来应聘，他提出双倍工资，但是，他很能干，是个好助手。 2. 续写思路。一个风雨交加的晚上，Tom需要Henry一起去防护农场，但是看不到Henry的人影。段首指导语第一段Tom以为Henry在睡觉，第二段Tom认为自己雇佣错了人。这两句话基本设定了故事发展的主题。我们可以大胆的想象出：当Tom去Henry房间找他的时候，他的确在睡觉，而且拒绝和Tom一起去抵御暴风雨。而当Tom对Henry很失望，正准备自己去工作时，发现Henry早在暴风雨来之前已经做好了准备工作。农场上的东西井然有序，他们不需要在暴风雨中再做什么了。其实，他找到的是一个很好的员工。 3. 写作风格。注意语言、动作、心理、情感等细节描绘。尝试使用动词、形容词、定语从句、名词性从句、状语从句、非谓语动词以及被动语态来刻画人物的语言、动作、心理、神态以及环境氛围。注意运用恰当的代词、逻辑衔接词把句子连接成文。 重点词汇：

anxious adj.焦急的 violently adv.暴力地

rage n.狂怒 calm adj.镇静的 peaceful adj.平静的 respond v.回复 disappointment n.失望 nevertheless adv.然而

unexpected adj.意外的 seize v.抓住 重点短语： 1. take hold of 抓住 2. filled with sth. 充满 3. in advance 提前 重点句型：

1. so...that... 结果状语从句的倒装结构。

2.It be extremely evident that... that引导的主语从句。 3.no sooner...than... 时间状语从句的倒装。 4.It be...that... 强调句。 Paragraph 1

Tom thought Henry must still be sleeping.So anxious was he that he knocked at the door of Henry’s room violently.（描写Tom 在暴风雨来临的时候，找不到帮手那种焦急的情绪。）To Tom’s astonishment,Henry was still lying in his bed.（令人意外的情况，与Tom的极其焦虑相比较，Henry好像没事一样。）It was extremely evident that Henry didn’t realize how serious the situation was.（Henry在这样严重的暴风雨天气还在坦然的睡觉，很明显他没有意识到情况有多么糟糕。）Filled with rage,Tom shouted, “Get up!There is a big storm.We must work right now.”（看到这个场景，Tom更加愤怒） Calm and peaceful,Henry responded“,Sir,have you forgotten I told you that storms wouldn’t disturb our sleep?Why not just go back to

sleep?”（然而，Henry却异常平静，无动于衷。） Hearing the words, a wide disappointment took hold of Tom.(此情此景，留给Tom的只有失望。) Paragraph 2

Tom thought he had hired the wrong man.Feeling helpless,he rushed out to work on his own.（孤身作战，Tom感到很无力。）Nevertheless,no sooner had he gone outside than an unexpected scene came into his sight,all the roofs covered and all his chicken,horses and cows settled.（然而，当他到室外正准备干活时，看到了意外的场景，一切都井然有序。）Tom was seized by a strong sense of relief,tears streaming down his cheeks.（这种强烈的转折令他如释重负。）It was Henry that did all the work well in advance before the storm came.（此时此刻金他才明白，原来是Henry 早在暴风雨来之前就把农场整理好了。）He realized he had hired the best man.（结局皆大欢喜，Tom找到了最好的员工。）

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文章分析和写作指导

1. 主旨大意。这篇文章是以第一人称进行描写的，讲述的是一次全家团聚，在海边玩，哥哥姐姐们在做饭，年龄小的孩子在游泳，因为“我”不会游泳，当“我”看到一艘渔船的时候产生兴趣，因此就独自驾驶这条船上在海中玩，

2. 续写思路。文章最后提到，在海中，“我”并不能很好的操控这条

船。第一段段首指导语说的是“我”的船慢慢的飘向深海，第二段段首语说的是当“我”醒过来，“我”躺在床上。根据第二段段首句反推第一段内容，在第一段中，“我”应该没有控制住渔船，落水了，并且失去意识。第二段当“我”醒过来，“我”才知道“我”落水后的情况，有人救了“我”，而且把“我”送去医院。这次意外是一个教训，这种冒险可不能再轻易尝试了。

3. 写作风格。在原文中并没有出现对话，因此，建议在续写时不要进行对话描写。尝试使用动词、形容词、副词、定语从句、名词性从句、状语从句、强调句、非谓语动词以及被动语态来刻画人物的语言、动作、心理、神态以及环境氛围。注意运用恰当的代词、衔接词描写文章的情节递进。 重点词汇：

hence adv.因此 nevertheless adv.然而 seize v.抓住 desperation n.绝望 accompany v.陪伴 unconscious adj.无意识的 adventure n.冒险 重点短语： 1. get rid of 摆脱掉

2. attract one’s attention 吸引...的注意 3. a sense of desperation 绝望感 4. as a matter of fact 实际上 5. make up one’s mind 决定 6. cherish life 珍惜生命

重点句型：

1. so...that... 结果状语从句的倒装结构。

2.It be extremely evident that... that引导的主语从句。 3It be ...that... 强调句

My boat was gradually pilled towards the deeper part.So dangerous was the situation that it was impossible for me to get rid of the risk without others’ help.(描写“我”在海中所面临的危险情况。)Hence,I shouted loudly in order to attract my siblings’ attention.（面对危险，“我”大喊寻求救援。）Nevertheless,it was extremely evident that they didn’t hear me.What’s worse,a big wave came and threw me from the boat.(“我”的“报警”没有效，更糟糕的是，一个大浪打来“我”落水了。)I was seized by a strong sense of desperation,struggling in the water,waving my hands with all my strength.（落水后，“我”在水中拼命挣扎）After a while ,I began to sink and lost my thought.（结果“我”开始失去意识）

When I came to life,I was lying in a bed.I was accompanied by

my parents and siblings in the hospital.（“我”的家人陪着我，大家都很关心我的情况。）As a matter of fact,it was my brother that saw and saved me from the sea.(醒来后“我”才知道是我哥哥救了我。)I was unconscious when I was rescued.They immediately sent me to the hospital.（“我”被救后又被送去医院。进一步描写前段的情节，与上文呼应。）Feeling fortunate,I made up my mind to cherish life and not to try such adventure again.“(我”从中吸取经验教训。)Mother said we would have a celebration for another life given to me.I told them the celebration would never be held at the beach.（文章最后一个的结局。）

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文章分析和写作指导

4. 主旨大意。这篇文章主要介绍了Alice在12岁的时候，有个同学Lisa经常在别人面前批评她的缺点，这让Alice很生气，但是她的父亲鼓励Alice积极面对别人对她批评正确的地方。Alice接受了爸爸的意见，勇敢面对别人的批评。

5. 续写思路。Alice大学毕业之后到好莱坞发展，想成为一名演员，

但是2年都没有找到工作，一个导演直接告诉她因为她鼻子太大脖子太长，不可能成为电影明星。段首指导语第一段描述Alice听到这个话后很难过，第二段说Alice去剧院想要找到一份唱歌的工作。结合两段段首语，我们可以推断出Alice想起她父亲的建议，当别人对自己的批评是正确的时候，要勇敢面对，既然她在好莱坞两年都没有找到当演员的工作，说明她的确不适合当演员，但是她可以发现自己其他的优点，比如唱歌。因此，给自己重新定位，一定可以实现梦想，获得成功。

6. 写作风格。文章的时态应该是一般过去时。续写时尝试使用动词、形容词、定语从句、名词性从句、状语从句、非谓语动词以及被动语态来刻画人物的语言、动作、心理、神态以及环境氛围。注意运用恰当的代词、逻辑衔接词把句子连接成文。 重点词汇：

depressed adj.沮丧的 comfort n.安慰 propose v.提议 bravely adv.勇敢地 possess v.拥有 attractive adj.有吸引力的

nevertheless adv.然而 brilliant adj.极好的 position n.工作岗位 opportunity n.机会 excitement n.兴奋 delight n.高兴

performance n.演出 applause n.掌声 audience n.观众 eventually adv.最终 重点短语：

1. make up one’s mind 决定 2. occur to 想到 3. apply for 申请

4. to one’s amazement 令某人惊喜的是 5. think highly of 高度评价 6. spare no effort to do 不遗余力

7. get a better understanding of 更好的理解 重点句型：

1. so...that... 结果状语从句的倒装结构 2. Propose that sb.should do 宾语从句虚拟语气 3. It be extremely evident that... that引导的主语从句 4. What 引导的主语从句

Alice was very sad when she heard that.So depressed was Alice that she called her father for comfort.(Alice很难过，向父亲寻求安慰)Her father proposed that she should face others’ criticism bravely, as he did when she was 12 years old.（她父亲希望Alice积极面对别人正确的批评）Hearing the words,she made up her mind to accept the fact that she didn’t possess an attractive outlook.（因此，Alice决定接受自己不够美丽的现实）It was extremely evident that she couldn’t become a movie star. Nevertheless, she had a beautiful voice and sang very well.（但是Alice唱歌很好。）One day,when she was watching an opera show in the theater,a brilliant idea occurred to her.She could apply for a position of singing.（当她在剧院看演出的时候受到启发，决定寻求一份演唱的工作。）

Alice went to a theater and tried to become an opera singer there.To her amazement,the director thought highly of her voice,thus providing her with an opportunity to sing on the stage.（剧院的导演对于Alice的声音评价很高，因此决定给Alice一个机会。）Filled with excitement and delight, she spared no effort to practice and prepare for the performance.The show turned out to be a great success.（Alice全力以赴的准备，演出非常成功）Hearing the applause of the audience, Alice felt grateful,tears streaming down her cheeks. Eventually, Alice got a full-time job in the theater.What her father said was right.She got a better understanding of her father’s words (总结，父亲的话是对的，积极面对别人的批评，正确认识自己的缺点和不足，努力一定会收获成功。)